So we just need to avoid pronouns for Midas. Eg. “Midas Beauty Concepts began in 2010…” We should not later use “It” to refer to Midas. In paragraph 1 we have “The idea was simple but powerful.” That’s fine. “To make premium beauty parlour equipment…” no pronoun.
” Here “It” refers to “Makeida Midas”. We should replace “It” with “Makeida Midas”. So rewrite: “Makeida Midas marked a chapter. Makeida Midas transformed into a complete and forward-thinking beauty concept.” That might be repetitive but okay.
Paragraph 3: no pronoun.
Paragraph 4: no pronoun referencing Midas.
Paragraph 5: no pronoun referencing Midas.
Paragraph 6: no pronoun referencing Midas.
Paragraph 7: no pronoun referencing Midas.
Paragraph 8: no pronoun referencing Midas.
Paragraph 9: no pronoun referencing Midas.
Thus we fix paragraph 2.
Also avoid contractions: “wasn’t” -> “was not”. “You’re” -> “you are”. Need to check.
Also “they rebranded” okay.
Also “This wasn’t a name change.” -> “This was not a name change.”
Also “Either” etc.
Also “A good primer is a must.” fine.
Also “It fills in lines smooths pores controls shine and helps your makeup stay in place.” Might need punctuation: “It fills in lines smooths pores controls shine and helps your makeup stay in place.” Keep as simple.
Also some sentences need split.
Also “When you need something a high-quality liquid concealer works best.” maybe “When the customer needs something a high-quality liquid concealer works best.”. The customer” is pronoun but not main keyword.. Okay.
Also “For occasions go for an oil-free liquid foundation.” “For occasions” For special occasions.” fine.
Also “All while feeling comfortable on the skin.” fine.
Also “Your eyes are the center of attention.” fine.
Also “Finish the look with a coat of curling mascara.” fine.
Also “Blush brings life back to a base faster than anything ” fine.
Also “Apply an warm peach shade.” fine.
Also “To complete the look focus on the lips.” fine.
Also “Matte lipsticks that don’t transfer are still popular for events and long wear..” “don’t” -> “do not”. Also double period? Should correct.
Also “For daily use people are turning to hydrating lip oils, satin lipsticks and lip stains.” fine.
Also “A tinted lip oil is especially great.” fine.
Also “Your lips stay plump, hydrated and looking fresh all day.” fine.
Also we must keep the number of newlines/paragraphs same. So produce 9 paragraphs.
Also keep punctuation.
Also we need to keep “Midas Beauty Concepts” and “Makeida Midas” unchanged. Also keep “Revlon Colorstay Skin Awaken 5 in 1 Concealer”
Also “Revlon Colorstay Looks Book Palette” unchanged.
Now rewrite each paragraph with words, no contractions avoid pronouns for main keyword.
Paragraph 1: “Midas Beauty Concepts began in 2010 in Parco Bazar, Palayam, Calicut under the leadership of Muhammed V and Abdullah V. The idea was simple but powerful. To make authentic and premium beauty parlour equipment and cosmetic products available to everyone. That vision laid the foundation for what would grow into India’s beauty parlour equipment and cosmetics showroom.”
Rewrite: “Midas Beauty Concepts began in 2010 in Parco Bazar, Palayam, Calicut under the leadership of Muhammed V and Abdullah V. The idea was simple but powerful: to make authentic and premium beauty parlour equipment and cosmetic products available to everyone. That vision laid the foundation for what would grow into India’s beauty parlour equipment and cosmetics showroom.”
To make authentic and premium beauty parlour equipment and cosmetic products available to everyone. That vision laid the foundation for what would grow into India’s beauty parlour equipment and cosmetics showroom.”
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